Control the lively flow
Posted on November 1st, 2008 by admin
If your sentence has a very complex structure, it can be a bit difficult to read. When you find that you are skimming text, this is probably the cause. Take this fine example:
Saroah’s essay demonstrated (still goes on) what the qualities of an (still goes on) effective ruler should be, however, (still goes on) he forgot about how the common people would react to these (still goes on) qualities.
Here is an much better and improved sentence:
Saroah’s essay demonstrated what the qualities (still goes on) of an effective ruler should be, however (still goes on), he neglected the (still goes on) common people’s reaction.
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